Sunday, April 10, 2011

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This scene takes place just as Lissa and Mitch have been revived from hypersleep.  They share a cubicle in the sleeper bays while awaiting the medical staff to assist them with recovery when Lissa becomes aware that Mitch is staring.
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She sensed Mitch’s eyes moving over her body. The sleeper outfit covered her breasts and hips, but left her midriff and long legs exposed, offering little more coverage than a bikini. She gave him a nervous glance and he averted his gaze.

Busted.

But it wasn’t like she hadn’t gotten an eyeful of his toned chest and other interesting landmarks before she’d gone into her sleeper.  She just wasn’t sure if his interest was purely physical or he suspected something.

25 comments:

  1. Awesome six with great build up of mystery.

    Glad you're back! I LOVE the cover and can't wait until The Outer Planets releases so that I can scoop up a copy. :)

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  2. I can feel the tension in this one. Terrific six, Laurie and the cover is to die for!

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  3. Nothing like waking up after months of sleep and finding a guy eyeballing you, especially a hunk our heroine has a past with he's clueless about. Lovely show of both.

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  4. Awesome Six and Great chemistry with just a look!

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  5. What a tempting six. I want more of these two. :)

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  6. I'm thrilled with all the comments already especially since I was so late to register.

    @Jessica Oh, I'm sticking around, for sure. Won't be here every week, but hope to join in at least twice a month. :)

    @Jenna I'm so glad the tension translated. I'm glad you love the cover. I can't stop peeking myself. Razzle Dazzle really did a great job with it.

    @Sandra Sookoo Thanks! :)

    @Arlene Thanks for stopping by, CP/IP on mine.

    @Rebecca Royce Thank you! So glad this scene is working as intended.

    @Gem Sivad Hope to deliver more of Mitch and Lissa soon.

    Okay, off to read some amazing Six Sentence Sunday snippets from my peers.

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  7. Uh-oh, there's something to suspect? Love the sound of this book. Great 6!

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  8. Love this snippet. So much going on under the surface. Though the surface is very nice too lol.

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  9. I imagine technology of the future found a way to keep bodies toned even in hibernation. Great six!

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  10. @Cate I'm kinda partial to that "surface" too. :)

    @Chrystalla Great call, and yes that's addressed, though I don't know it will survive edits. We'll see.

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  11. I really love how Lissa's mind works, Laurie. Does he know, always seems to linger in the back of her mind.
    Well done.

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  12. But will they be sharing a sleeper bunker?? great 6

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  13. @DL Jackson Thanks for your feedback, IP o' mine. Of course, you'll probably be seeing more of this soon (and again!)

    @Claire Robyns Well...this is a romance, so chances are they'll be sharing sleeper arrangements at some point! :)

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  14. Nice six, and I like the little hook at the end.

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  15. Ooo, that last line really got me. I was enjoying her enjoying the view, then that last line...

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  16. I do love this pair together. Good work, as always. :o)

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  17. Ooh, good build up and tension!

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  18. Love the underlying sexual tension in this.

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  19. Arlene's comment cracked me up! But it also perfectly summed up my feeling about this snippet! Gives a whole new meaning to "Good morning."

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  20. I love the buildup of tension along with wondering what's going to happen when he finds out the truth.
    Oh, also, I wanted to let you know I got my ray gun. Thank you! The kids keep trying to steal it so I get to say, "Please do not touch Mommy's ray gun." I'm thinking of making a sign.

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  21. You use words to build tension well.

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  22. You use words to build tension well.

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  23. Great six, Laurie. How sad for her that she can't be sure of his motives for checking her out.
    And I'm sorry that my blog comments chose to banish you to the alternative dimension. It seems to be the same people every time - at least you have company. :(

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  24. Excellent, Laurie! And I love the cover.

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