Saturday, January 15, 2011

Six Sentence Sunday

Another week has gone by and it's time again for Six Sentence Sunday.

This week I'm posting a second excerpt from Chapter 1 of my Science Fiction Romance WIP, The Outer Planets.  (Just to clarify, this is not the hero that the heroine meets, but he is a major player in the story.)  I even managed to find a pic that somewhat goes with the blurb.  Not what I was picturing, but I couldn't seem to find what I was looking for on the internet.

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Lissa willed her legs forward, stepping onto the deck of Captain Daniel Storing’s ship. Behind her the hatch to the docking bay closed with a clack, followed by a low rumble as the air lock depressurized.

Escape route sealed. Point of no return.

She looked into the commanding blue eyes of the man before her. The eyes of Zeus, an awe-stricken friend had once described them. He studied her, neither relief nor anger evident in his gaze, his face molded into its usual professional scowl.

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24 comments:

  1. Jessica E. SubjectJanuary 16, 2011 at 4:58 AM

    I love how you show her reluctance to go in and when she finally does, her inability to get out. Great six! Can't wait to read more.

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  2. Sandra SookooJanuary 16, 2011 at 7:29 AM

    Oooh, very intense moment!

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  3. LynceeJanuary 16, 2011 at 8:07 AM

    Great meeting scene

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  4. Lisa FoxJanuary 16, 2011 at 8:50 AM

    Very intense!

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  5. Sarah GrimmJanuary 16, 2011 at 9:08 AM

    I really like this six! Intense.

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  6. Marie DeesJanuary 16, 2011 at 9:38 AM

    Nice. I really love the description and the emotion behind it all.

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  7. Angel MartinezJanuary 16, 2011 at 9:38 AM

    The eyes of Zeus - well said, Laurie, very evocative

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  8. UnknownJanuary 16, 2011 at 10:42 AM

    Great six. Very vivid.

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  9. ArleneJanuary 16, 2011 at 11:26 AM

    I adore a guy that scowls. You've shown the captain's persona well, with such little word count. Add in the tension from the airlock hissing closed, no escape beyond this point, and just a lovely set up.

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  10. Marsha A. MooreJanuary 16, 2011 at 11:29 AM

    Great to feel her apprehension. A tense moment for her!

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  11. Jayel KayeJanuary 16, 2011 at 12:11 PM

    I agree with Jessica. I could feel her panic. Good snippet

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  12. D CarneyJanuary 16, 2011 at 12:31 PM

    A scowl just can't be good. SMH...she's in trouble now.

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  13. Cate MastersJanuary 16, 2011 at 12:57 PM

    Excellent six! A very vivid scene.

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  14. Julia Rachel BarrettJanuary 16, 2011 at 1:14 PM

    Very, very nice. I like her hesitation.

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  15. Lex ValentineJanuary 16, 2011 at 1:28 PM

    Eyes of Zeus. Great line!

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  16. L. A. GreenJanuary 16, 2011 at 4:07 PM

    Thanks to everyone for your comments and thoughts. I'm really enjoying SSS.

    Hope to be back next week with more.

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  17. UnknownJanuary 16, 2011 at 5:03 PM

    Wow! Don't know if she's in for a butt chewing or not! Need more...

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  18. AnonymousJanuary 16, 2011 at 5:57 PM

    "professional scowl" Love that! Great six!

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  19. Pip GreenJanuary 16, 2011 at 11:47 PM

    Oh, I feel scolded by those eyes already!

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  20. JoAnne KenrickJanuary 17, 2011 at 8:12 AM

    Point of no return! eep. Love it!

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  21. LaurelCKrieglerJanuary 17, 2011 at 2:23 PM

    Love it! Brilliant six!!

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  22. Emily CaleJanuary 17, 2011 at 10:01 PM

    Love the description of her look. Nice pic as well.

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  23. Kaye ManroJanuary 18, 2011 at 7:18 PM

    Laurie! Wow! Great writing-- just makes me want to read more. I can't wait to see your book published.

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  24. L. A. GreenJanuary 23, 2011 at 11:55 AM

    Thanks, everyone, for the added comments. *waves to Kaye*

    I'll try to return the favor this week, since I wasn't around last Sunday afternoon.

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