Saturday, January 22, 2011

Six Sentence Sunday

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More From The Outer Planets

Two weeks ago, you met the heroine, Lissa Bruce, and her first thoughts on seeing the ship that would be her home for the next several years.  "Hello, bitch."

Last week, you were introduced to the stern and domineering Captain Daniel Storing as Lissa took her first hesitant step onto the deck of the planetary research vessel, NSS Robert Bradley.

But...

What has Lissa left behind?

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And so very far away from Mitch.

She closed her eyes against the explosion of regret and longing his memory brought. Had she done the right thing by not contacting him, not dragging him into the maelstrom her life had become since Bobby’s death? Her misplaced loyalty had kept them apart before. Now it would be time itself that separated them--five long years--and distance--billions of miles.

I should have pinged him.




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25 comments:

  1. Jessica E. SubjectJanuary 23, 2011 at 3:55 AM

    The last sentence made me laugh. The rest feels so dramatic until then. Great six!

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  2. ArleneJanuary 23, 2011 at 6:12 AM

    You qualify for best line sunday.
    'Should have pinged him.' Love it.
    Love and regret shines from every word. Well done.

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  3. Pip GreenJanuary 23, 2011 at 7:27 AM

    Should have 'pinged' him? Now there's an intriguing finish!

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  4. Sarah GrimmJanuary 23, 2011 at 8:24 AM

    Love the regret she's feeling. Well done.

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  5. Barbara ElsborgJanuary 23, 2011 at 8:25 AM

    I remember that line, Laurie!! The essence of your story in these six sentences!!!!Well done.

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  6. Sandra SookooJanuary 23, 2011 at 8:28 AM

    Nothing like regret to motivate a girl! Great six!

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  7. LaurelCKrieglerJanuary 23, 2011 at 9:10 AM

    Great snippet - looking forward to more :-)

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  8. Jayel KayeJanuary 23, 2011 at 9:27 AM

    ah. Pinging. true cyber sex.

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  9. L. A. GreenJanuary 23, 2011 at 9:52 AM

    I'm loving your responses @ "pinged." LOL

    Thanks to my IPs Arlene and Barbara, for reading lines from this story yet again. :)

    Getting a late start today, so off to comment on SSSers.

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  10. Lisa FoxJanuary 23, 2011 at 10:17 AM

    That is an awesome last line!

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  11. D CarneyJanuary 23, 2011 at 11:13 AM

    I agree with everyone else...that last line is a very nice touch.

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  12. Kaye ManroJanuary 23, 2011 at 12:14 PM

    Since I've been back, I've come to look forward to your six sentences, Laurie! My, girl, you are such a good writer. I want this book!

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  13. L. A. GreenJanuary 23, 2011 at 12:42 PM

    Thanks, everyone, for your continued comments.

    Kaye, I hope you'll be able to read this book, too! :) Glad you're enjoying my work. So glad you're back from the burried-in-work realm.

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  14. Darcy DrakeJanuary 23, 2011 at 1:23 PM

    Mmmmmmmm yummy space captains.

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  15. Leigh EllwoodJanuary 23, 2011 at 1:52 PM

    Nice emotion and setting here, thanks for sharing.

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  16. AnonymousJanuary 23, 2011 at 2:37 PM

    Love it! Nice release on the last line.

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  17. Linda MorrisJanuary 23, 2011 at 2:57 PM

    I like the melancholy vibe to this.

    http://lindamorriswriter.blogspot.com/

    Six Sentence Sunday

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  18. UnknownJanuary 23, 2011 at 3:23 PM

    You can really feel her longing and regret. Love the little twist of humor at the end : )

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  19. Joleene NaylorJanuary 23, 2011 at 3:43 PM

    Love the ending line Punchy and fun - a good contrast to the serious paragraph above.

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  20. Alanna CocaJanuary 23, 2011 at 4:30 PM

    Great six!

    (googling Pinged now)

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  21. L. A. GreenJanuary 23, 2011 at 5:41 PM

    @ Alanna LOL Doubt you'll find it. It's futuristic slang I made up for this story.

    Thanks for your comments everyone.

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  22. TrishJanuary 23, 2011 at 7:41 PM

    Loved the lines. Great emotion (loss and regret.) Very well done.

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  23. UnknownJanuary 24, 2011 at 2:34 AM

    "...pinged him"!!!! Love it!

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  24. JoAnne KenrickJanuary 24, 2011 at 8:50 AM

    haha ping away! LOVE IT

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  25. Emily CaleJanuary 24, 2011 at 9:27 PM

    I agree with everyone: the last line is great.

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