Saturday, January 22, 2011

Six Sentence Sunday

Welcome! Glad you stopped by my Six Sentence Sunday snippet #3. Be sure to click the link to read excerpts from all the other talented writers. Whether they incite a tease, a sigh, or a gasp, the offerings are truly stellar.

More From The Outer Planets

Two weeks ago, you met the heroine, Lissa Bruce, and her first thoughts on seeing the ship that would be her home for the next several years.  "Hello, bitch."

Last week, you were introduced to the stern and domineering Captain Daniel Storing as Lissa took her first hesitant step onto the deck of the planetary research vessel, NSS Robert Bradley.

But...

What has Lissa left behind?

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And so very far away from Mitch.

She closed her eyes against the explosion of regret and longing his memory brought. Had she done the right thing by not contacting him, not dragging him into the maelstrom her life had become since Bobby’s death? Her misplaced loyalty had kept them apart before. Now it would be time itself that separated them--five long years--and distance--billions of miles.

I should have pinged him.





25 comments:

  1. The last sentence made me laugh. The rest feels so dramatic until then. Great six!

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  2. You qualify for best line sunday.
    'Should have pinged him.' Love it.
    Love and regret shines from every word. Well done.

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  3. Should have 'pinged' him? Now there's an intriguing finish!

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  4. Love the regret she's feeling. Well done.

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  5. I remember that line, Laurie!! The essence of your story in these six sentences!!!!Well done.

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  6. Nothing like regret to motivate a girl! Great six!

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  7. Great snippet - looking forward to more :-)

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  8. I'm loving your responses @ "pinged." LOL

    Thanks to my IPs Arlene and Barbara, for reading lines from this story yet again. :)

    Getting a late start today, so off to comment on SSSers.

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  9. I agree with everyone else...that last line is a very nice touch.

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  10. Since I've been back, I've come to look forward to your six sentences, Laurie! My, girl, you are such a good writer. I want this book!

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  11. Thanks, everyone, for your continued comments.

    Kaye, I hope you'll be able to read this book, too! :) Glad you're enjoying my work. So glad you're back from the burried-in-work realm.

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  12. Nice emotion and setting here, thanks for sharing.

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  13. Love it! Nice release on the last line.

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  14. I like the melancholy vibe to this.

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  15. You can really feel her longing and regret. Love the little twist of humor at the end : )

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  16. Love the ending line Punchy and fun - a good contrast to the serious paragraph above.

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  17. @ Alanna LOL Doubt you'll find it. It's futuristic slang I made up for this story.

    Thanks for your comments everyone.

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  18. Loved the lines. Great emotion (loss and regret.) Very well done.

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  19. I agree with everyone: the last line is great.

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