Saturday, January 29, 2011

Sunday Six Sentences

Back again for another Sunday Six.  Be sure to check out all the links to excerpts posted by a variety of talented writers on the Six Sentence Sunday central hub, here

Today's excerpt from The Outer Planets puts quite a spin on Lissa's thoughts posted last week. 

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Lissa broke eye contact and looked at the officer standing a stride off the captain’s left elbow. She expected Commander Kelso, the ship’s Executive Officer to be tailing the captain, or maybe the Chief of Boat—COB Browne, but…

Lissa’s heart stuttered and the breath lodged in her throat.

Oh my God.

Mitch.

Every muscle in her body tightened and her heart pounded. What in the hell was he doing here? Did he recognize her?

She averted her eyes to the captain, regrouping.

"May I introduce First Lieutenant Mitchell Coe," Daniel said, “My new aide de camp.”

24 comments:

  1. The moment her world starts to spin the other way!! Very nice, Laurie

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  2. Can we say awesome! I mean it, you pack a tight punch in just a few sentences. This story is too good not to be published.

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  3. Nicely done. I want to know more about this "Mitch"

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  4. Definitely want to read more. Want to know why she feels that way about Mitch and their history. Great excerpt!

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  5. Looks like Mitch is about to rock her world!

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  6. I'm going to guess that Mitch recognizes her. Great work.

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  7. Ah, great. Love the unexpected and her reaction.

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  8. Mitch has already rocked her world, but its clear he's about to do it yet again. Great twist here, Laurie, nicely done.

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  9. Nicely written, thanks for sharing!

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  10. lol sounds like she's got some trouble. Nice!

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  11. @ Barbara, Kim, Kaye, Jayel, Taryn, Marie, Arlene and KL/LE. Thank you, all, for your encouragement, thoughts and comments. You make my day!

    @Jessica There's definitely a dark and twisty backstory on these two.

    @Sandra Oh yes, she's got trouble with a capital OMG!

    @Rebecca But there's a catch. He doesn't recognize her, because her identity has been changed and her face surgically altered as a condition to gaining a berth on the mission. If she tells him who she is, she risks blowing her "cover" and very possibly endangering his life.

    Meanwhile, he's dealing with his own hot-blooded complication. More in weeks to come. :)

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  12. Ooo, sounds like trouble is coming. The good sexy kind of course!

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  13. LOL That's the plan, Lisa! :)

    KL/LE, I don't see a link for you on the SSS site. Are you participating under another name?

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  14. Something tells me she's in trouble! LOL

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  15. Great tension. Definitely makes me want to read more.

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  16. That isn't happiness to see him. LOL

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  17. Sounds like Mitch rocked her world. Can't wait to see where you take it from here.

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  19. Oh boy, looks like trouble, full steam ahead, he he he!

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  20. Oh bother! Did he just HAVE to turn up? Great writing (and I want more!)

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  21. Thanks to all the later comments. I ran out of time to return the favor last Sunday, but will try to get to your blogs tomorrow.

    Thanks for your thoughts and comments!

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